Bloodied and scarred, as I looked around I waited with baited breath to see if even one moved. It had been moments ago, I was escaping war, bloodshed and violence. Screaming hoarsely, courageous soldiers rammed gleaming spears through us. My eyes glazed over as I imagined it: metal piercing skin, kissing hearts and lives goodbye. Suddenly, I felt frosty breath cascading down my neck. I turned to see malevolent, unsmiling eyes scan me all over. With immense swiftness, I felt my right leg tear and blood spill out. My world went black and my mind drifted away into sheer emptiness. I opened my eyes to silence. Furthermore, beating hearts .Also, colour returning to soldiers' mangled bodies.
OUCHY! I felt that!
ReplyDeletewell done sienna a very violent story but still it was very good and kept me hanging on interest. from summer !!!
ReplyDeletewow..a fantastic story Sienna..I love the opening sentence. From Mrs Rose
ReplyDeleteWhat a powerful piece of writing Sienna, I particularly like how you have used short sentences to create an air of tension.
ReplyDeleteWell done, I look forward to reading your next one.
Wow - what a haunting piece of writing, Sienna. You've really captured what it must be like in battle. You've used so much powerful language - your words paint such a vivid picture of the scene in my imagination! I particularly liked 'metal piercing skin, kissing hearts and lives goodbye' - WOW!
ReplyDeleteMr K :-)
well done it's amazing
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