Hi Poppi, what a super story! You really engaged the reader by beginning with an idea that they could relate to and then turning and twisting the ideas to make them quite dark and horrifying. After reading the extract, I will never ask for an alternative again! Lisa Team 100WC London, UK
Hi Poppi, I really love the language you've used for the challenge this week, especially the verbs as they're really powerful and make me want to read on to the end. Well done! Miss Darrroch, Team 100WC, UK
Hi Poppi, what a super story! You really engaged the reader by beginning with an idea that they could relate to and then turning and twisting the ideas to make them quite dark and horrifying. After reading the extract, I will never ask for an alternative again!
ReplyDeleteLisa Team 100WC London, UK
It's good except it so violent
ReplyDeleteHi Poppi, I really love the language you've used for the challenge this week, especially the verbs as they're really powerful and make me want to read on to the end. Well done!
ReplyDeleteMiss Darrroch, Team 100WC, UK